Final Re-write

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In this week's assignment, we were required to rewrite a blog and use the articles or the feedback given to us as a guide to improve our work and make it up to a better standard.

When re-writing a blog I didn't receive any feedback this week so to complete this task I had to use the articles provided to complete this assignment. While reading these articles I found them very helpful and can apply these tips to my future blogs and any writing that I might do in the future.

One of the articles that I read was called ‘Active versus passive voice. From reading this article I feel I have learned a lot. At the very beginning of this article, I read that an active voice is used for most non-scientific writing. Using an active voice for the majority of your sentences makes your meaning clear for readers, and keeps the sentences from becoming too complicated or wordy. Even in scientific writing, too much use of passive voice can cloud the meaning of your sentences. I also found this article very helpful because it had some great examples of sentences that were either passive or active which helped me a lot. I was able to use this to edit and rearrange some of my sentences.

Avoiding common pitfalls was the next article that I read from this article. I found that it was very helpful and I know how to avoid these ‘pitfalls’ in the future. This is going to improve my writing skills and I will benefit greatly from reading this article. I found the very first paragraph of this article helpful when it stated ‘Expletives are phrases of the form it + be-verb or there + be-verb. Such expressions can be rhetorically effective for emphasis in some situations, but overuse or unnecessary use of expletive constructions creates wordy prose. Take the following example: "We must find a solution." The same meaning could be expressed with this more succinct wording: "We must find a solution." But using the expletive construction allows the writer to emphasize the urgency of the situation by placing the word imperative near the beginning of the sentence, so the version with the expletive may be preferable.’ It also stated that we should still avoid excessive or unnecessary use of these. The most common kind of unnecessary expletive construction involves an expletive followed by a noun and a relative clause beginning with that, which, or who. In most cases, concise sentences can be created by eliminating the expletive opening, making the noun the subject of the sentence, and eliminating the relative pronoun.

So from reading both of these articles I feel as though I will benefit greatly in the future.